• D_C@sh.itjust.works
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    1 day ago

    ICE attempts to murder a US citizen with a shot in the back of the head in front of children.

    Nailed it?

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      18 hours ago

      Okay this is good.

      Let’s iterate this until it’s perfect. I think attempted unnecessarily waters it down.

      How about

      ICE shoots a US citizen in the back of the head in front of children.